Monday, October 28, 2013

Beginnings of the End

"Doctor!"
The cry rang out in the night, dark though it was. A figure materialized out of the gloom, and with the figure came another ululating cry, "Doctor!"
A small amount of fog and mist rolled around him, by no means engulfing, but still enough to obscure.  The shrouded figure walked through the streets, silent now.
He looked a bit past middle age, but the most pressing feature he wore now was concern and fear.  These two seemed to grip his face in a vice, pinching and crowding the wrinkles with more lines.

"Doctor!"

"All right, it's all right! I am awake, please come in and stop that infernal racket."
The man addressed as the doctor had opened the door by the end of his announcement and motion the figure inside.
"It's trouble Doctor. That's what it is." The figure said first, his manner not a little bothered.
"What is it Seth? What's this trouble? I hope it was trouble enough to warrant bundling me out of bed and into this miserable state which doesn't feel a whit like sleeping at all."
"I'm sorry Doctor, But...." Seth began to say.
"It is really all right Seth, I was asleep anyway."

"Deaths Doctor, that's what I say, it's been a terrible night." He hesitated here, feeling like he had to stop for both respect of the dead and to wrap his head around the idea of what he was going to say next.
"Deaths? Here? What happened? What's all this about?"
The Doctor's manner changed at once. Before it had been peevish and uninterested or irritated. Now the Doctor's voice was sharper and speech much more broken.
"Where," He asked Seth. "What happened? Is anyone else injured?"
The Doctor moved suddenly out of sight into another room and his voice got a little more muffled.
"No one else Doctor!" Seth was happy to report this.
"Well go on!" The doctor reappeared from aound the corner. He had hastily dressed and his black bag was in one hand.
"In the Park. It was __ and __. They were.....I don't know what to say doctor. It looks like an accident, but like no accident I have ever seen Doctor."
They merely looked at one another at this announcement.
"Take me there at once!"
Seth nodded and headed off south, towards the Park.
"Now finish telling me what you have seen so far." The Doctor said before they had reached a handful of steps.
"I didn't see anything, Horten saw it all when he discovered them this morning."
"You left Horten with this?" The doctor cried, distress at this evident.
"No, not I doctor! I left to get you when the Inspector arrived. He's the one who told me to fetch you."
"Inspector?" The Doctor seemed to be very confused at this.

The barouche rumbled through the dawn's light seemingly ignorant of the alien motions it presented to the streets of Garden. Not many were up in the City at this time and much less in this section of Garden. The light was not enough to work by, and many people like the doctor owned their homes and didn't  work regular hours like the rest of Garden.
The barouche passed a house......*insert description of the house*

First meeting of the doctor and the inspector.
b*insert Watson meeting Holmes via Stamford. Describe the inspector, compare to a man in black*


3 comments:

  1. How late did you write this?? Haha 11:55? You are rushing a bit. I can tell when you are rushing your writing. There is no need to rush your writing :)
    The ideas are fine, but the writing is definitely hurried. Also, it is not Seth, but DeMarc who goes to find the Doctor. Also, I already described the policeman, and he is young. Unless the description is for the doctor?

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  2. I made two mistakes....and two mistakes only! :) ahahahaha yes, i was rushing. I was so tired last night after 3 pies, 3 sheets of cookies and 2 pie crusts.......

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  3. You shouldn't need to rush. This is why I started early, so you wouldn't think to rush. There's such a drastic difference between rushed writing and rushed writing, it makes me cringe. I'd rather an outline of what you intend than rushed writing.
    And that's a lot of baked goods. Why were you doing writing at midnight? NOT A GOOD IDEA

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